The march down a narrowing path continues...from 167...down
to 1. Today we begin the 3rd Round of the WRiTE
CLUB playoffs -- where we will whittle the surviving list of contestants from
six to four. There will be three
bouts...on Mon - Wed - Fri...with our fighters randomly re-matched using their
submissions from round two. Once again,
we will have outright winners for each bout and one wildcard (the loser with
the most votes), so every vote counts! How are those winners chosen? By you.
Anyone can vote by simply leaving the name of the writer who resonates
with you the most in the comments below.
After you do that, please spread the word so we can maximize the
exposure for our contestants.
The winners will be posted in the afternoon on September
14th.
The winning writers who move into the quarter-finals (Monday,
September 15th) will have the opportunity to "tweak" or edit their
current submission based on the input voters have left for them. Those "tweaked" submissions will also
be used to battle in the semi-finals, where only two will become finalist. No wildcard in the semi-finals. The two
fighters who make it to the finals will be asked to submit 500 word writing
samples for a 3rd time, and those new samples will be forwarded to our
celebrity judges. Of course I'll post them here on my blog for you to comment
on, but it will be our judges who make the final selection. If by chance our
judges vote end in a tie, the votes left in the comments will be used as the
deciding factor.
Our writers are warmed up and biting at the bit, the crowd
is at a frenzy pitch, let's get this bus moving!
Good luck to all of the WRiTER’s!
And now…..In this corner welcome back to the ring.....The Baron
The Russians made the first spaceship with a gun.
Being a battleship, I guess I’m related, but only in the way humans are related
to rats: distantly and with loathing.
The kiss of air on my titanium skin tickled after
years of cold, hard vacuum. A gloved hand punched in the override code to open
the hatch. My isolation wasn’t enough. Now they wanted me dead. They’d come to
kill the AI.
That’s a shitty term for it anyway: artificial
intelligence. As if my intelligence was somehow fraudulent. I lived once. My
memories were real. I died once, and I remember nothing of being dead.
If death is nothing, I’m not going back without a
fight.
I turned off the lights inside. I had a hyped up
power source that couldn’t run out for four hundred years, and I’d spent years
rerouting most of my access panels, programming subroutines for today. But even
my diligence couldn’t break some of the hardware controls built into the smart
ships. My murderers were free to come aboard.
My hatch slid open, and the first new oxygen in
fourteen trips around my tiny star cycled into my corridors.
“Pheonix Star?” a man asked through the speakers of
his enviro suit. My decks were too cold for humans. They’d be stuck in their
suits until I turned on the heaters. “Please respond, ship.”
Ship. Something to be ordered about. Well, good luck
with that, captain clueless. I was no one’s slave, even if I couldn’t fire my
own engines without a command code.
I watched the group enter the air lock. There were
fifteen of them, and one was being carried between two others. Blood welled up
from his―or hers, I couldn’t tell through the bulky suits―leg. It wouldn’t drip
to my deck grates. It was too cold. Unless someone slit a femoral artery, any
bleeding wound would freeze to the outside of the suit before it could stain my
decks.
“Don’t complicate matters by baiting the CI, Dr.
Ryta,” a woman said. Her suit had the markings of a lieutenant. No one had a
captain’s suit, so she must be the ranking murderer.
“And what would your extensive training into
shipboard intelligence programs suggest we do to contact the ship?” Dr. Ryta
asked.
“Do you think it killed itself?” a soldier asked.
“That’s ridiculous, how does an AI commit suicide?”
“Shut it,” the lieutenant said.
“The men have a point. This is aberrant behavior for
shipboard AI,” Dr. Ryta said.
“We don’t have time for this. Corpsman, get corporal
Haywain to sick bay. These old ships have environment pockets so you can thaw
him with some heat sticks.” She paused to look over the group. “The rest of you
with me.”
The airlock finished cycling and two with the
injured soldier broke off at the first intersection. The other group tromped
towards the bridge.
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And in the other corner, also anxious to return to the ring,
let me re-introduce.... Lord Codpiece
Say what you will about smugglers, but they have a flair for creativity. I pondered this as I crouched in a hidden compartment, somewhere beneath the bilge of a leaking ship. The stench was like a living thing. It burned my lungs with each shallow breath. But I had to admit, it beat a prison cell any day.
The ship was a two-masted trader, bound for the port of New Kestani. If she made it, I'd be truly surprised. A thump and creaking noise announced the opening of a trapdoor overhead. Legato, the captain, poked his bearded face through.
"Get up on deck, and be quick about it," he said.
"Why? We're not even out of the harbor yet," I said.
"We're about to be boarded for inspection. And they've got a gods-damned witch with them."
I cursed. If her delving magic found me hiding, I'd be in real trouble.
"I'll need a shirt from one of your men," I said. "Something grubby, so she doesn't get too close."
"One whiff of you should do the trick," Legato said.
"Captain!" I said in falsetto. "You make me blush."
By the time I'd ditched my rumpled finery for sailor's garb, the inspection team had already boarded. I joined the line of sailors at the leeward rail.
Armed women in the deep blue tabards of the queen's guard crawled over the ship like angry termites. Which the ship already had aplenty, judging by what I'd seen below decks.
Legato made his displeasure known to the chief inspector, a severe-looking woman who stood on the wheel deck with an unmistakable air of authority. The woman beside her, though, was the one that drew my eye. She was short and dark-haired. Not unattractive, if you forgot what she was. No tabard in the queen's colors for this one. No, she wore a slate dress in some iridescent material. My eyes wandered down the neckline of their own accord. Until I saw the medallion, and I remembered.
I stared at her a moment too long. She caught me at it. I kept my eyes down as she glided over, stepping carelessly over the tarred ropes and other filth that covered the deck. Legato kept it that way while in port, to discourage inspections like these.
She stopped right in front of me, just as I feared. I tried to resist meeting her gaze. To no avail. Her eyes were slate, too, and they had me.
"See something you like?" she asked. Her voice was like a song.
I shook my head, not trusting myself to answer. She wrinkled her brow, and I realized my mistake. I was the only clean-shaven man on deck.
"You don't look like much of a sailor," she said.
"You don't look like much of a witch," I answered.
The next thing I knew, I was dangling boots-up over the rail, with gold and pilfered jewels raining from my pockets.
"How do I look now?" she asked.
The ship was a two-masted trader, bound for the port of New Kestani. If she made it, I'd be truly surprised. A thump and creaking noise announced the opening of a trapdoor overhead. Legato, the captain, poked his bearded face through.
"Get up on deck, and be quick about it," he said.
"Why? We're not even out of the harbor yet," I said.
"We're about to be boarded for inspection. And they've got a gods-damned witch with them."
I cursed. If her delving magic found me hiding, I'd be in real trouble.
"I'll need a shirt from one of your men," I said. "Something grubby, so she doesn't get too close."
"One whiff of you should do the trick," Legato said.
"Captain!" I said in falsetto. "You make me blush."
By the time I'd ditched my rumpled finery for sailor's garb, the inspection team had already boarded. I joined the line of sailors at the leeward rail.
Armed women in the deep blue tabards of the queen's guard crawled over the ship like angry termites. Which the ship already had aplenty, judging by what I'd seen below decks.
Legato made his displeasure known to the chief inspector, a severe-looking woman who stood on the wheel deck with an unmistakable air of authority. The woman beside her, though, was the one that drew my eye. She was short and dark-haired. Not unattractive, if you forgot what she was. No tabard in the queen's colors for this one. No, she wore a slate dress in some iridescent material. My eyes wandered down the neckline of their own accord. Until I saw the medallion, and I remembered.
I stared at her a moment too long. She caught me at it. I kept my eyes down as she glided over, stepping carelessly over the tarred ropes and other filth that covered the deck. Legato kept it that way while in port, to discourage inspections like these.
She stopped right in front of me, just as I feared. I tried to resist meeting her gaze. To no avail. Her eyes were slate, too, and they had me.
"See something you like?" she asked. Her voice was like a song.
I shook my head, not trusting myself to answer. She wrinkled her brow, and I realized my mistake. I was the only clean-shaven man on deck.
"You don't look like much of a sailor," she said.
"You don't look like much of a witch," I answered.
The next thing I knew, I was dangling boots-up over the rail, with gold and pilfered jewels raining from my pockets.
"How do I look now?" she asked.
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Remember the WRiTE
CLUB motto, it’s not about the last man/woman standing, it’s about who
knocks the audience out!
Voting for Lord Codpiece!
ReplyDeleteAnother tough choice. I like both, but am giving the edge to Baron in this round.
ReplyDeleteWow! Ship boardings are in today, aren't they? The Baron has my vote. I was riveted to that piece.
ReplyDeleteBoth entries are excellent. The Baron gets my vote today.
ReplyDeleteThe Baron.
ReplyDeleteI like both. There are parts of this writing from Lord Codpiece that I enjoy more. But I want to read more of the story from The Baron. It grips me more. So The Baron has my vote.
ReplyDeleteThe Baron. It's just really unique. Even though it's very abstract, I still see clearly what is happening.
ReplyDeleteWow, that entry from the Baron is just scintillating. Makes me think of Firefly. While Lord Codfish also submitted a strong entry, there wasn't quite the same level of nonstop, leaning-forward-in-my-computer-chair interest.
ReplyDelete(my vote of course is for the Baron)
ReplyDeleteI really like both writers! Darn it. Vote for Baron.
ReplyDeleteThe Baron gets my vote. I'd keep reading.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed both. Lord Codpiece has my vote though.
ReplyDelete("by baiting the CI, Dr. Ryta" -- Is that a typo meant to be AI, or is CI another something that I should have known about? Just curious. Been bugging me for days. )
Lord Codpiece for me.
ReplyDeleteLord Codpiece
ReplyDeleteTough one. The Baron's is more chilling, Lord Codpiece more rambunctious. I'm not 100% in on the AI's voice in Baron, but that's pretty subjective. Codpiece has a couple places that could be tightened. I'd read more of either.
ReplyDeleteToday, it's The Baron by a hair.
What a tough pairing! But I think this time it's Lord Codpiece, by a nose.
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ReplyDeleteComputer acting weird today. Sorry for the deletes. Tough decision. They are both great. Today I cast my vote for Lord Codpiece. Writing humor is difficult and I think LC does it well.
ReplyDeleteGAH, this is a tough one. Both have me wanting more but... my vote is for Lord Codpiece. By the thinnest of margins.
ReplyDeleteThese two pieces are well matched on a lot of levels. Voting on the basis of characterization--Lord Codpiece is the one I would keep reading. Though with the hopes that the Baron gets the wild card.
ReplyDeleteLord Codpiece gets my vote as well.
ReplyDeleteSUCH a tough call! I'm going with The Baron, just because it kept me a teensy bit more interested.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed both pieces. Great voice and set up and pacing in both.
ReplyDeleteThe last paragraph in the 1st one sways my vote to the Baron :)
Lord Codpiece!
ReplyDeleteLord Codpiece.
ReplyDeleteThe Baron. But it was a hard choice.
ReplyDeleteLord Codpiece. Good luck to you both.
ReplyDeleteLord Codpiece by a whisker.
ReplyDeleteLord Codpiece. Both are great, but I enjoyed the humor Codpiece's piece.
ReplyDeleteThe Baron
ReplyDeleteLord Codpiece
ReplyDeleteLord Codpiece.
ReplyDeleteThis match for me, is about as evenly matched as they come. Both LC and the Baron have terrific stories of which I would like to read more, but I like Lord Codpiece's style of writing a wee bit better.